Your welcome story is one big block of text
The 'Welcome to Bramble & Bean' section is a single paragraph of about nine lines on desktop. On phones it runs far longer. Most visitors will skip it.
What to do: Split it into three short parts, or a short list: what you bake, where your ingredients come from, and when to visit.
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What we saw on your page
“Bramble & Bean started in 2014 when we decided that Harrogate deserved a café where the bread was baked on site every single morning”
Why it matters
Hungry visitors scan. If the good details are buried, they miss your local flour, milk and early baking.
For designers
Break the story into short paragraphs or three small icon rows with bold lead-ins. Keep the line length short.
Two independent reviews agreed · confirmed against your screenshot
Where this comes from: Writing-for-the-web research · About this check









